Diversity means different, various, unlikeness or multiform, for example human have different skin color, culture (different races) is diversity, different kind of plants, animal can also be diversity. Respect different diversity is very important. When we respect diversity we will hardly ever have wars, therefore famine, innocent people get killed, etc. will be no longer a big problem. Respecting diversity also help the society have better life, also the incomes of every person will also increase through trading. We share information by respect diversity, so the knowledge will also increase. Generally, by respecting diversity, we can make a better planet.
If no one on this planet respect diversity, then the result could be bad. Wars will occur constantly, the citizen will no longer work and join the army. We will know very little about the world outside. Countries will not be united, lack of trading make the total incomes of every person decrease. Thus, by getting none of the information outside, we never get to know more technologies, we wouldn’t have come this far in technology. So respecting diversity can a lot of changes in the world.
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Some of my sentence doesn't really connect to the last sentence which made it not flow very well. I really good at organization but often make mistakes, and have little of vocabulary.